Elizabeth sat and watched [a couple] dance, trying not to wish she occupied the dance floor, too. Suddenly, a young man sat next to her and she nearly jumped in surprise.
“A thousand apologies, Miss Lizzie.” He nodded towards the dancers. “Not dancin'?”
“She got sick at th' last minute and still insisted I come.”
- Overcoming Her Pride
Oh, and one more thing! I need your help. My opening of TJCRW is in desperate need of your services. (Why I said that in a Scottish accent in my head, I have no idea! Wait.... Never mind.) Anyway, it's not the best of openings. I don't know if it's because it's a little boring or hard to understand or what - I started with action, too!
The opening scene is below. (It's the State Ice Dancing competition, by the way, and my character in first person's name is Nikki.)